"GL3APP" - читать интересную книгу автора (vol03)

H But wildly Beren gazed around.
Emptied the tall trees stood. The ground
Lay empty. A lonely moon looked grey
Upon the untrodden forest may.



I prefer H because it gets rid of the conceit (it is little
more) about the moon. (This sort of half-hearted
personification is, of course, to be distinguished from
genuine mythology.)

[Against this my father scribbled on Lewis's text: 'Not so!! The moon
' was dizzy and twisted because of the tears in his eyes.' Nonetheless he
struck the two lines out heavily in the typescript, and I have excluded
them from the text.]

635-6. An excellent simile.

641. Peabody, though a great friend to metrical resol-
utions in general, finds this particular resolution
(Bewildered enchanted) 'singularly harsh'. Per-
haps the original text read wildered.

: [The reading in B was bewildered, enchanted and forlorn. My father
then changed bewildered to wildered and placed it after enchanted.]

651-2. JHL transpose.

[This was done. Cf. lines 1222 - 3, where these lines are repeated but left
in the original sequence.]

[After line 652 B had:

Thus thought his heart. No words would come
from his fast lips, for smitten dumb
a spell lay on him, as a dream
in longing chained beside the stream.

After seeing Lewis's comment my father marked this passage 'revise',
and also with a deletion mark, on which basis I have excluded the four
lines from the text.]

Only in PR. Almost undoubtedly spurious. 'The latest redac-
tors', says Pumpernickel, 'were always needlessly amplifying,
as if the imagination of their readers could do nothing for itself,
and thus blunting the true force and energy of the Geste....'
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