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unsailed and shoreless, wild and wide;
to East and East the hills did hide
beneath the tangled woodland shade,

65-6. A: There Celegorm his ageless days
doth wear amid the woven ways,
the glimmering aisles and endless naves
whose pillared feet that river laves

67. Esgalduin A, but Esgaduin in the rough workings, which is
the form in The Children of Hurin (p. 76, line 2164) before
correction.


73. A: There Melilot the lissom maid
79-84. Not in A.
85-93. A and B(1) (with one slight difference):

There bow was bent and shaft was sped
and deer as fallow phantoms fled,
and horses pale with harness bright
went jingling by on moonlit night;
there songs were made and things of gold

See note to line 48.

96. A: rolled over dark Broceliand,
B(1): rolled over far Broseliand,
In B(1) Ossiriande is pencilled against Broseliand, as at line
41.

Commentary on Canto I.

An extraordinary feature of the A-version is the name Celegorm given to
the King of the woodland Elves (Thingol); moreover in the next Canto
the role of Beren is in A played by Maglor, son of Egnor. The only
possible conclusion, strange as it is, is that my father was prepared to
abandon Thingol for Celegorm and (even more astonishing) Beren for
Maglor. Both Celegorm and Maglor as sons of Feanor have appeared in
the Tale of the Nauglafring and in the Lay of the Children of Hurin.
The name of the king's daughter in A, Melilot, is also puzzling (and is
it the English plant-name, as in Melilot Brandybuck, a guest at Bilbo
Baggins' farewell party?). Already in the second version of The Children
of Hurin Luthien has appeared as the 'true' name of Tinuviel (see p. x ig,
note to 358 - 66). It is perhaps possible that my father in fact began the
Lay of Leithian before he stopped work on The Children of Hurin, in
which case Melilot might be the first 'true' name of Tinuviel, displaced
by Luthien; but I think that this is extremely unlikely.* In view of Beren
> Maglor, I think Luthien > Melilot far more probable. In any event,
Beren and Luthien soon appear in the original drafts of the Lay of